tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7578331.post111487127571633908..comments2023-12-30T13:27:33.339-05:00Comments on I'll Show You Mine: Just catching upShaferhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03853025177038771474noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7578331.post-1115251392424740072005-05-04T20:03:00.000-04:002005-05-04T20:03:00.000-04:00While a drawl is an appropriate (and melodious) vo...While a drawl is an appropriate (and melodious) voice, I actually prefer "strip mall."Mr. Babylonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02025461992709861766noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7578331.post-1115220496725350372005-05-04T11:28:00.000-04:002005-05-04T11:28:00.000-04:00You can easily drawl "mile" out to "myull" and "fi...You can easily drawl "mile" out to "myull" and "fields" out to "feyullds" which would put you over the eleven syllable mark. It wouldn't work in Texas where mile is pronounced "mall" and fields is pronounced "fillds" but in Georgia it may be different.Shaferhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03853025177038771474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7578331.post-1115174415873506932005-05-03T22:40:00.000-04:002005-05-03T22:40:00.000-04:00syllabic fix: change "fields" to "strip mall"syllabic fix: change "fields" to "strip mall"Mr. Babylonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02025461992709861766noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7578331.post-1114999301224234142005-05-01T22:01:00.000-04:002005-05-01T22:01:00.000-04:00Phoebe's wiggle delights, as does the perpetuation...Phoebe's wiggle delights, as does the perpetuation of "Afternoon Slant." Add a syllable to the first line, though. & so glad people seem clear that it's 11 syllables PER LINE & not per stanza. Thanks, poet. Adam "sadistic challenge" GolaskiAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com